It’s all about birds, ferns, singing trees really. And salesmen of vacuum suckers.
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(Image by Craig Carry)
It’s all about birds, ferns, singing trees really. And salesmen of vacuum suckers.
You can read it here
(Image by Craig Carry)
lovely verse, the city that doesnt let the salesmen of life in
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Or that lets too many of them in…
Thank you for saying “lovely verse!”
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Exactly, the city can suck the life out of you if you’re not careful. Very cleverly written!
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Thank you! I’m so glad you enjoyed it!
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Oh this is precious. Proposed to herself. We often do, don’t we when nb else will?
Courageous read, my dear. Stunning, as ever. Don’t u just love these prompts?
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If we don’t propose to ourselves, my dear, who will?
I like courageous — thank you very much!
Yes, these prompts are really working. I can’t wait to see what comes next.
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Me too. I got hooked.
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Irrevocably
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Vacuum suckers – sold this to me! You cleaned up with this – got me smiling, thinking, wondering what on earth you’ll do next – this poem you at your exciting best!
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And you keep bringing smiles and happiness to me! Thank you!
Why don’t you try the challenge too next month?
I knew vacuum suckers would do it!
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Just signed up for the VV emails – see your influence at work!
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That’s great! We can all be on the same issue — something like classmates!
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Wow, so many stunts in each verse. I loved all of it.
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Thank you!
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Beautifully expressed, beautifully shaped. Love the way you’ve interpreted it, made me smile, made me think. Yes, I know what the problem with salesmen is…
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Every clever woman knows! Thank you so much for taking the time to read!
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Gorgeous poem!
“In this terrific city
she bought a ring
and proposed to herself”
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Thank you very much!
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My pleasure 😇
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☺️
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Absolutely brilliant write! Well done!!!
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Thank you very much!
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I remember reading this magnificent work of yours.
“salesmen of vacuum suckers”
This gets me all the time. Love it and can’t wait to read more of your work if your working on something new. 🙂
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I’m glad you liked it, Charlie! Thank you!
I’m always working on something new, I hope so are you.
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Very much so. 🙂
Your work like I told you before always push boundaries and your vocabulary with words always paint a surrealist masterpiece of creation. 🙂
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What would poetry be without a touch of surrealism? Thanks again, it really means a lot.
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If surrealism wasn’t around…who knows. I’m sure new types of weird genre of writing would have merged and surrealism would sneak its way into that mix. 🙂
You are welcome. 🙂
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Basilike I’m in love with this poem!! It’s so good.
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Thank you ,💙
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You’re welcome!
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Any kisses!
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Not only do you write poems, Basilike, you create scenes, a series of scenes. Intense and enigmatic. And then I wander around in these scenes, back and forth, thinking, feeling, and dreaming… Love.
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Thank you!
I like creating scenes in poetry, I prefer it to being so personal that it becomes cryptic. I am very happy that you enjoy them!
Love, B.
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Incredible piece, I really enjoyed this.
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Thank ypu 🙂
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You’re welcome.
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Congrats my dear! And most lovely as always.
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Thank you 💙
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Your work is always so intriguing. I love how your mind thinks. If I’d been there, I’d have proposed to you too. X
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That’s so sweet! Thank you! I would have said yes.
Why not Visual Verse yourself?
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I think I kind of have a few times, but just not as well as you do… 😉
(now I just have to get a divorce)
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“You said you loved meee” (whining voice)
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I dooooooo. It’s just that I’m still married to a man. It’s complicated.
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“If you don’t tell him, I’ll tell him myself” (drunken voice)
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I haven’t actually Visual Versed on Visual Verse, of course, but I have with my own pics haha.
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Why not? I think I would have tried that if I was doing photography.
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I had never heard of it, tbh. I’m still not sure either. I can’t see how to navigate it properly and see the word Twitter quite prominently. I don’t have Twitter now.
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Ι don’t have either, it’s not necessary. It means you won’t be notified if your work is accepted. To find out if they published me, I just go to their archives, click on my name and see everything they published by me. On July 1 they’ll have a new photo prompt. You can send them your writing until the 15th. No emails either, you just paste your work in a special field they have.
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That’s great. I’m more of an artist than a writer (I think) so I’m not sure if I can write something inspired by art that doesn’t “speak” to me. I looked up the artists and wasn’t inspired by a few of them…but I may give it a go in July. Thanks for suggesting it. Do you know where they source the art from and do they ever have photos submitted? I didn’t see any.
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Not sure SD is the right forum for me. I’ve never written for, or been asked to write there.
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A living biography
preciously compressed
within the breast
of this beautifully dressed
piece of poetry 😎
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I want to hug you when you leave me comments like this! Thank you!
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After reading your poem
I feel you already have 💛
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💚
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A lovely mix of colors and images and feeling. Well done as usual!
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Thank you!
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Congratulations! Your proclivity for writing is unparalleled.
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Thank you, Lance! I’m honored you think so.
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Basilike, my sincere pleasure.
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And thank you for making me smile!
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You’re very welcome!
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For whatever reason I have finally got into your sight…it going to be a good day
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I hope so!
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Well for the time I couldn’t get in
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You couldn’t see my blog?
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No I couldn’t
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I just realized I hadn’t seen you on WP for quite some time now.
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Yesterday I could get in but again today I can’t
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Only WP knows why…
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I’m having a hard time again….i truly don’t know why
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Have you tried contacting them at WP?
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I know what it is
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I know what it is now
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Were you able to fix it?
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Not yet
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I liked this a lot, and I’m very happy that Closed Circuit published it. Congratulations!
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Thank you, Nick!
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I was drawn to your site by its name. I’m lucky to have found it, and I will return …
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And I’m very pleased you found it! Thank you!
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I don’t know how I missed this. I’ve been a bit down lately and falling behind on the blogs I normally read. I even saw the prompt at VV and jotted down something I tossed.
Anyway, you were far more successful than I. I love the notion of “…birds, ferns, trees singing a closed circuit where nothing ever leaves without her consent…” and the notion of her being the agency for her own happiness and making herself beautiful again.
And making new clothes, pinstriped, like a caged animal — what a great line. I’m not sure how the transition from feminity to masculinity (or androgeny) plays out, but it definitely gets my brain swirling with ideas. Well done!
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Thank you! The “pinstriped, like a caged animal” line is my favorite too — a stroke of genius kind of line, if I may say so myself.
As for the androgyny element, I don’t know how this would have played out if I had written it without the picture. But I saw she had that ring in her breast pocket, and that made me think that traditionally it is men who propose, so she had to become her own man — if that makes any sense? Not count on any man for her happiness.
I too am a little behind with the blogs I follow, so no worries. Sometimes we need the time out.
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How you handled the ring is perfect. Why wait for validation from someone else?
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Exactly!
When I first saw the picture, I thought it was a man — someone sad over unrequited love perhaps? But the face was a woman’s, so it got me thinking “why is she in men’s clothes and why she has a ring?” It was a good picture, after all.
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You write with a maturity that a lot of popular, published poets today don’t have. Stunning poem. So very beautiful.
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Nitin, thank you so much! I can’t tell you how much your comment means.
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Reblogged this on Sudden Denouement Collective.
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Thank you!
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Thank you very much!
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